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Okay.. need some feedback on an article I'm working on for a journal/magazine, that I gotta submit on Wednesday. (Meeting with the editor then)

Topic is coping with study loads and whatnot, but I decided to take a slightly different approach (which was okay with student services, so here I am)

Note: Sarcasm intended, I gave up trying to keep it out in the first paragraph. I want my cynical side back!
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We’ve all heard the “study hard”, “read all chapters”, “take extensive notes”, “attend the lectures” advice. Some of us have even got the extra step to read up on the multitude of ways on how to do all those things such as taking notes in class. Some students do apply these techniques and more, most others; however resort to lazier ways of ‘studying’ (i.e. reading the power point slides a day/an hour before the exam)

I don’t know how the proccess is like in other universities, but over at UOWD we get a week off for a study break right before the final exams. Wait a minute…study break…right before the final exams? Now is that a good idea? When any prospective student hears the word ‘break’ in any sentence, they ignore anything said before and after the word ‘break’ and focus on the word ‘break’! Yes, so during study breaks you get people going out of the country, sleeping in, etc. In other words: do anything but work/study and use their brains…(granted that last one can apply even when one’s taking a break but that’s another article altogether.)

Now here’s my question: Who was the wise guy who put the two words together in the first place? ‘study’ and ‘break’. If he thought it would grab people’s attention, he was wrong. First of all ‘study break’ is an oxymoron: a phrase which contradicts itself. You can’t study and have a break at the same time. (Unless you’re in some upside down universe…not that this world’s right side up, mind you) Second of all it’s human nature for most college students to miss out the ‘study’ part of the sentence there and do what every human wants to do once in a while – take a break.

Of course taking a break results in realization that you’ve yet to study for your finals once the time for finals come, because during the break you thought you had all the time in the world to study. Sound familiar? It should! And I’m sure most of you know what that’s called -- Procrastination. Or the “I’ll do it later because I have enough time to do it in” approach. Any student attending any university has the potential to be a good student; some find the subjects boring and dry as a bone, others just get stuck in the fallacy that we all seem to have enough time to do everything. We don’t. Curious that by the time we die, our “to do inbox” will still be full of stuff we’ve put off doing for ages, only, guess what…you’ve ran out of time to do the stuff in at this stage!

Time doesn’t procrastinate, people do. So next time you see the words "study break" in any given sentence, do feel free to tell your brain to shut up and read the entire line first before jumping to conclusions on what to do.
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Any changes I oughta make? Anything sounds overboard/outta place? Anything can be made 'funnier'? Look okay generally?

Edit: This isn't for a scholary journal or anything of that sort, hence why the mood of this thing isn't all serious/down to earth. (I can be down to Earth, honest! :P when I sleep I'm down to Earth)

Comments

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countrykat
Jan. 31st, 2005 10:07 pm (UTC)
Okay first of all this depends on the type of journal/magazine it will be sent to. If it is a very scholarly one, I would say the second paragraph about Study breaks is more opinionated than fact based. I would maybe change that one up a bit to not sound so sarcastic and opinion based.

The only other thing I would change is the line "So.. Here’s what you do… study hard, be evil. Take over the world with your vast knowledge and then take a break. " I dunno but that doesn't sound to scholarly. maybe change that up some.

As I said, if the journal/magazine you are writting to has articles of this type, then it sounds fine to me. Otherwise you might consider doing those revisions.

Oh and grammatical error I noticed in the line "I don’t know how it’s like in other universities, but over at UOWD....." that how should be what.

Otherwise, great article! should wake some people up to the real underylying problem. Now if we can just get off the darn internet so much XD
jessiesk
Feb. 1st, 2005 03:44 am (UTC)
scholary journal? HERE? You're kidding right?! :P Student Services allowed that type of an opinion. It's for a journal that's for students and by students; so pretty much anything goes. I'm sure if they wanted scholary they wouldn't ask students to write articles...

Wasn't trying to be scholary, if I were none of the sarcasm would be in there; but I know how boring those scolary articles are to read, especially if the target audience is your typical student. (My assignments are actually quite serious, most of the time anyway.. ::Sweatdrop::)

Grammar error, natch, oughta be 'how' because we get a study break some universities go straight into exams. I know what it's like in some universities because I transferred from AUD to UOWD. Two different systems there. But I'll probably change that sentence there to make more sense because I didn't elaborate it in there... Thanks for pointing this one out!

As for the "study hard be evil. " line, am not sure I oughta leave that in there, wanted to 'go out with a bang' but I think I flubbed it. Darned brain on allergies eh-heh....
countrykat
Feb. 1st, 2005 06:44 am (UTC)
Okay read the new ending. I like that one much better. Sounds much better.
cosmicat
Feb. 1st, 2005 07:06 am (UTC)
I like it!

I am not, however, the authority on these things...

:)
jessiesk
Feb. 1st, 2005 12:13 pm (UTC)
Bah...authority... meh... :P authority will just tell me not to be so sarcastic and to research the stuff....

I just need general opinions of people out there. To see if the stuff makes sense and easy to read/follow, mainly. When I write these things I know what I mean, but if an outsider reads it they may not...and they can't exactly get into my head...

cosmicat
Feb. 1st, 2005 12:50 pm (UTC)
Aaaah... :) Well.. in that case! I think it is very coherent - it makes sense to me!

Mind... we seem to think along the same lines with respect to a few things. ::BG::

:D

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